Monday, November 16, 2015

My Poem

I am proud of this because I put lots of effort into it.
I did this because it was something that i was proud and it is my best poem yet.

?WALT choose words appropriate to writing purpose
Purpose: To Entertain
Text Type: Poem (Model)
Our Success Criteria
  • Use of adjective-noun with hyphen e.g. tall-story, biscuit-mugger
  • Change line after after every idea
  • Ideas are short - two or three well-chosen words
  • Use some alliteration e.g. full-of-fib fever
  • Use some rhyming (Try Rhyme Zone)
  • Be true about the subject
  • Select line starters carefully (a variety)

My Dad

He’s a:
Big hugger
food lover
Likes to discover
Kind of tall
hates the mall
Always an entertainer
Funny joker
Such a hard-worker
Also a smirker
Loves his sleep
His clothes are cheap
Very strong
‘LEAVING ME’ is his favourite song
Rugby mad
Soccer sad
So glad I have

my DAD!

My Character Description

Last week for my writing I was doing a character description about my Brother Julian.
I am proud of this because It was about one of my family member and I put lots of effort into it.
I did this because I am proud of it and I recon it is one of my best writing.

Julian My Brother
Physical Description
Character Traits
  • Short
  • Muscly
  • Black hair
  • Brown eyes
  • Bold clothing

  • Ignoring
  • Playful
  • Funny
  • Self confident
  • Sports
  • Rugby
  • Touch
  • Ripper rugby
  • Julian is very fast

WALT choose words that give the reader a vivid picture in their head
Purpose: To Entertain
Text Type: Character Description
My Writing Goal: Use full stops, capital letters, question marks, and exclamation marks correctly.
Success Criteria:
  • Shows physical description
  • Shows character traits and actions
  • Organised into correct sentences and paragraphs - intro / physical / traits / actions / ending
  • Strong nouns, verbs and adjectives
  • Uses a good simile and can use other language features effectively
  • Has an entertaining anecdote (little story that happened) about the character

Julian AKA My Brother
My brother Julian is a self confident  person who is crazy about sports.
He doesn't care what people think about him. He is a kind  to people he knows.

Julian has black hair and a big sense of humour. He is short but muscular, he is Maori. Julian lives with my dad and my bigger brother Aston also my cousin EJ. He cooks for my dad and me. Julian cleans up after him and recently he went up on a farm for docking  to earn money for him to spend or save.  He has brown bold eyes when you are far back you can still see his eyes. And Julian has bold clothing.

My brother can be a pain in the back side but he is still a loving brother to me. He is very playful with me we would play held at the park sometimes. Julian is very funny to his friends and family. He gets his funniness from my dad.
He’s annoying  because when I’m asleep he would wake me up and scare me.

Julian is a fast person when he was at primary school he was the fastest in the school. Rugby is his favorite sport because he made it in the under 14teens rugby team from Hastings boys high school.
When Julian was at primary school he made it to the Hawke's Bay under 11 touch team. Also when Julian was at primary there was a ripper tournament whoever won that went to the world's ripper tournament in Auckland they won so they went to Auckland  He was a year five when he went. And the coach of the team is my teacher Mr Moriarty.

My brother is the best brother in the world. If you meet him, you will know why.

By Keighan

My skipping challenge

I am proud of this because I am good at skipping and I reckon I could get more then that in a week.
I did this because it was something that I was proud of.

My skipping was hard for me because I had to show Aston how to skip properly. Also had to my own skipping done this took me three days.  My challenging thing was cross over. The easy one was 10 seconds of jump skipping. The thing that went well for me is 30 running skipping. The thing  that did not go well for me was 10 shuffles.